Create a five line poem about Intentness. Use some of the key vocabulary words from the Touchstone. You may write more than five lines. The poem can be blank verse. It does not have to rhyme, but it may. Hopefully you will craft some lines to increase our "paideia."
Intentness is something very few people can handle,
ReplyDeleteThat's a key reason half the class fell asleep watching the candle,
Priam was very concentrated and determined to retrieve his son,
And so he did and left to prepare for the fight against Achilles even though, he was done.
Angel
Angel, Stay awake! 100
DeleteNice rhyme
DeleteIan
10th year of the war, where succession required determination,
ReplyDeleteResulting in the death of a Trojan and King Priam's admiration,
Towards a warrior who had shed blood for his friend,
and ended up sparing the life of his victim's father in the end.
Out of 50 children, Priam came back for one,
An honorable, courageous, strong Trojan son.
Kofi, A loyal son and true! 100
DeleteThat was great :)
DeleteAchilles knows he's the warrior and Priam the king,
ReplyDeleteBut Priam kisses Achilles' hand which must sting,
Achilles treated Hector's body like a dirty sack,
Achilles' response was "I give him back because I give him back."
Priam and Achilles respected one another and slept together,
But now it's back to war, that day there was just nice weather.
Joyner L. Meregildo
Joyner, Great use of text, 100
DeleteIndividuals want or need to accomplish something they dream about
ReplyDeleteNectar that nurtures paideia
The dedication Priam had to retrieve his sons body
Enemy to those who believe work is not needed to achieve at life
Necessity if one wants to become something more
The state of mind, in which Achilles dragged Hectors body like a lifeless rag doll
Robert "prism" Rossi
Robert, Well done ..typos: son's Hector's
DeleteLike the nectar that nurtures paideia!! 95
Priam was a good father for his dedication
DeleteEmilio
Oh Priam, Priam
ReplyDeleteYour son is being dragged across the dust
Oh Priam, Priam
You must go to Achilles to retrieve his body, yes you must
Oh Priam, Priam
Achilles almost struck you down as you were in his tent
Oh Priam, Priam
This harmonious moment will be replaced tomorrow by much discontent
Jorden Leaf Wilson
Jorden, Nice style, Nice style.. Good last line! 100
Deletegood job using repetition
Deletekwame
I, Priam will put all of my intentness
ReplyDeleteTo stop Achilles from creating more resentment
The Trojans cry with a lot sentiment
the loss of our greatest warrior, whom soul deserves contentment
My intention is to honorably bury my son
like everyone desires..
for a loved one
-Jhasua “Eagle” Fontanillas
Jhasua, in line 4 switch whom to whose. Nice job, 95
DeleteAlmost thought this was mark twain, good use of a rhythmic nature and great vocabulary!
DeleteJunior "Swaggy J" Minaya
Priam the father of Hector
ReplyDeleteI come to you Achilles
to get my son I wish for
you to give him back
You must go Achilles to retrieve his body
Priam and Achilles respect each other very much.
Mutual respect was very much shown.
Aaron, How about Mutual respect was temporarily shown? 100
Deletepriam was very determined to get his son, good job
DeleteAlexi
My son Hector
ReplyDeleteoo why my son Hector
have been dragged across the dust
Achilles have killed you
Achilles have taking your life in front me
and i went to Achilles for your body back
and he have given it to me such a great man
for doing that even if he dont like us
Theo, Switch have to has. dont to don't 90
DeleteLine seven packs a punch but capitalize I.
Homer said: “…the greatest Greek warrior…killed the most courageous and strongest Trojan…” The father of the slain Trojan, King Priam, kissed the killer of his son’s hands, as he was intent on retrieving his son’s lifeless body. The Greek dragged Hector’s body in the dust. As a result, Hector’s garments became shoddy. Achilles, the Greek, reluctantly complied with Priam’s request to have back his son’s body and Priam complied with Achilles’ request for them to share a meal...
ReplyDeleteHector’s demise resulted in a deal.
James, Good, but late, 80
DeleteAchilles and Hector equally respected
ReplyDeleteWere destined to fight for their protected
Achilles won and Defeated Hector
Everyone knew he was the rightful victor
He kept Hector's body
to embarrass in front of troy
However, Priam came looking for his boy
He told Achilles that he has won
all he wanted was his son.
he tried to remind Achilles of his own Father
he was lucky Achilles didn't find him a bother.
Priam plead to Achilles and told him his sorrows
Achilles said he will get his son Tomorrow.
From this day on there was a mutual respect for one another.
They were enemies at war but for now Brothers.
Tyron. Late, but good. 80
DeleteYakubu Gana
ReplyDeletePriam, a leader to his people
Got on his knees to kiss Achilles' hand
The same hands that had proven to be lethal
The same hands which drove Hector into the sand
Achilles, a man of such great pride
Broke down in tears at the sight of the king
A king who bore it all with nothing to hide
And so the night ended with the two in sync
I like the flow the message was deep
DeleteOscar
Gana, Late, but good. 80!
ReplyDeleteJason Nesbitt
ReplyDeleteSenior Seminar
Period 4
Intentness poem
Priam was the father of Hector
Step up to his Foe Achilies
Asked for his son body
That’s all He wanted
Achilies at first disliked him
Treating to kill him
But then he realized
The old man was brave
They respected one another
But Tension was still there….
good use of rhymes
Deleteangel
Jason, Late, but good, 80!
ReplyDeletePriam father of Hector
ReplyDeleteHector be him slain
Asked Achilles the return of the body
On hand and knee he'd say
Achilles threatened to slay him too
place him with his son
but out of pity he returned the body
for he saw a father who was done.
it just show how good of a father is Priam
Deletejesus.
good rhyming and repition
DeleteBryan
Carlos Owl Mora
ReplyDeletePriam father of Hector
I walk up to you Achilles
to get my son
I wish for you to return him back
for what you might of did
go Achilles to get his body
as Priam and Achilles show mutual respect..
"For what you did" but overall its good
ReplyDeleteLuigey